Hi Perpetua,
no, I wasn't trying to write myself into the poem or into Elliot's vision.
Just took a line to see where it, in turn, took me.
Thanks for reading, glad it got somewhere in the end.
Cheers,
Frank
>as I said to Gary, Frank, is the idea to try and mimic TS Eliot?
>
>My problem with that is he can be a bit of a 'quotable quote a line' poet
>and the risk of examining one line, especially a rich one, is it can end up
>going over the same image rather than saying anything new.
>
>your poem is rich and descriptive but i don't get a feeling that you are
>really there in the scene, until the last two lines, which are great
>
>P-P
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>>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Hyper-sub - no, not the old city
>>Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2002 12:39:55 +1100
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>>(my line = 'streets that follow like a tedious argument')
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>>... and the old city is a wasting of time there is nothing of value
>>there
>>no return on that investment those twenty years of purgatude
>>spent with an aspirational heart every day from the beginning
>>when to walk that way was something fresh and new each pace
>>holding its own speed and reason much like here perhaps
>>here in this newer place with this newer purpose
>>so draped with the coatings now of experience knowledge
>>perhaps it is not the purpose that has changed not so very much
>>
>>this though this is not that ancient wreckage with its labyrinth
>>byways
>>foetid distractions those twisted streets that follow like a tedious
>>argument
>>renewed upon boulevards and avenues that open yawning black
>>in sickly honeyed invitation with each tempted visitation to that
>>past no
>>this is newer ground these paths are fresh and open look up
>>that blue is the sky in this place it is mine yours ours
>>if
>>you wish it
>>you and me and the coloured blue of our own sky
>>
>>no let us not go near to the old city
>>there is nothing there for us nothing
>>
>>~
>>Frank
>>
>>
>>
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>>http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
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