Hi Arthur,
You write:
>Bob, ' wrestle and tussle' were chosen as tongue trippers/twisters to ape
>the struggle between blackbird and worm. Poetry, for me, is distillation
>and I like every word to work as hard as it can so apart from describing I
>like them to mimic where they can and also as you point out there is always
>music.
And I go with that all the way! But I was hoping I was highlighting the last
line of the stanza:
"A blackbird on the lawn
listens to the earth turning,
beak seeks, strikes, spears and wrestles
a tussle of worm free."
where the phrase "a tussle of worm" doesn't sound too much like how I would
either say it or write it myself. The word "of" is what makes it awkward. I
think I was suggesting the words "wrestles/ a tusseling worm..." looks
better (and keeps the sound qualities I found in the original words you
use!). He-he, I don't find them tounge-twisters, I find them a delight to
say!
Bob
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