Hi Terri,
I once spent a couple of long summer days slowing up the Welsh borders,
listeing to slow rivers, and enjoying the coolness of driving the almost
empty past-midnight roads under a full moon... yeh...
But yr poem! Yr holiday/holidiary (interesting word mix that!).
Do you need the 1st stanza? The only two words that stand out for me are
"forest" and "sun."
There's also a sense of "my holidiary" and the poem includes "we" so is
there scope for... (anything more about we? or...)
Bob
>From: alderoak <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: sub: Redbrook
>Date: Sun, 28 Jul 2002 12:06:47 +0100
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>Redbrook
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>my holidiary has become
>a catalogue of then and then
>proof positive that we enjoyed
>the forest and the sun
>
>next to the Wye we took a break
>that hugged the skirts of Offa's Dyke
>parked in England drank in Wales
>and never walked the walk
>
>but wandered underground instead
>Clearwell Hopewell Puzzle Wood
>a glossary of ochre mines
>and iron streams of blood
>
>my holidiary has become
>a book-keeping of rivers swum
>scratches on a bag of clay
>it seals a teller's stones
>
>
>
>Terri )O(
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