I like it better now, perhaps because I have got more used to it.
SallyE
on 28/7/02 5:42 pm, Gary B at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Perhaps expand this stanza to describe the blood/step fathers in the way
> that you describe your mother etc?--grassy
>
> Thanks. I have received more requests to expand the end than either the
> rest. I want this to stay so lean it cuts and fear that expansion will dull
> its edge or even break it. I have changed mother and grandmother to add
> mundane specifics so it now reads:
>
> The Father Poem
>
> I have no father
> poem. Blood or step.
>
> I have no
> mother poem,
> though I should. She
> canned pickles and spoke
> her mind.
>
> I have a grandfather
> poem, where his barn
> burns when he no longer
> owns the barn.
>
> I have a grandmother
> poem. She was a saint
> and raised seventeen children
> on chicory and buttermilk biscuits.
>
> I have started a poem
> about my children. They will not
> write a father poem.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
>
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>
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>
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