Fun, Terri. I rather think that the impact of 'my holidiary' wiould be
greater if you didnt pre-repeat it at the beginning. Perhaps the poem would
start at 'Next to the Wye' or there could be another way of starting the
poem
bw
SallyE
on 28/7/02 12:06 pm, alderoak at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Redbrook
>
>
> my holidiary has become
> a catalogue of then and then
> proof positive that we enjoyed
> the forest and the sun
>
> next to the Wye we took a break
> that hugged the skirts of Offa's Dyke
> parked in England drank in Wales
> and never walked the walk
>
> but wandered underground instead
> Clearwell Hopewell Puzzle Wood
> a glossary of ochre mines
> and iron streams of blood
>
> my holidiary has become
> a book-keeping of rivers swum
> scratches on a bag of clay
> it seals a teller's stones
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>
>
> Terri )O(
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