I think the form allows for a sort of incremental insistence that we
continue reading to the end. I like it John, and if I had more patience may
try the form out for myself.
bw
James


>From: John Carley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: The Famine Road
>Date: Thu, 25 Jul 2002 19:12:59 +0100
>
>Hi all, here's a renga, or a set of solo tanrenga, or something. Any and
>all c&c welcome as always.
>
>Best wishes, john e c
>
>
>
>
>The Famine Road
>
>--
>                          gulls   ply the null space
>here are mountains   long since ground into dust
>
>who could own   this heritage   of home-made guns
>
>
>the suspect   avocado killer
>            hides   behind his map case
>
>rags of cloud   greying   into far off places
>
>
>beep for the sheep   you red Toyota
>                     rattling   like a ruin
>
>too stupid   to comply   with simple orders
>
>
>                   men in lycra   pedal past
>in search of something   punishing
>
>the cotton grass   like smoke   from rheumy Rochdale
>
>
>                              footfalls   straying from the road
>the lumpen scab of earth   a slab
>
>by peat black pools   a crow   attends a carcass




bw
James


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