A joy to read Ryfkah though a few suggestions in the text.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Poem: Kinneret
>Date: Wed, 24 Jul 2002 20:16:52 EDT
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>Kinneret
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> like Jesus (she walks on the sea
>she walks on the sea like Jesus)
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>The violin lake plays
>multiplication of loaves fishes
>She waves at fisher(s of)men (make a decision on this one. I'd go for
>fishermen as the Biblical reference is too heavy IMO)
>primordial embattled
>They gape at her magic
>brown hair wind-whipped
>bare body glorious in noonlight
>
>She wonders about this return
>recalls creeping from the sea
>Stones and sand scrape Single
>cells like herself merge
>multiply transubstantiate (change? they heavy link to Catholicism is maybe
>too weighty)
> last time the Brazilian coast
> now Galilee's shore
>
>Storm clouds collect on the west bank
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>A ghost cello bellows below sheer cliff
>She halts midstep on azure path
>hears Bruch's Kol Nidrei (Yes please, the Jaqueline du Pree version please)
>smiles enigmatically
>a crossword with too many answers
>she soars through the cosmos
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> to the source again
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>Ryfkah 7/24/02
bw
James
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