Delightful and smooth.
I didn't like your eschewing capitals but after a while it didn't matter.
As a matter of interest when you eschew punctuation as you have done here I
assume it is a thoughtful act chosen in the interests of the poem. It would
be enlightening to understand the criteria you apply when making that
choice. Is it some sort of clue to a ' stream of consciousness' approach??
----- Original Message -----
From: "Frank Faust" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, July 19, 2002 10:05 AM
Subject: sub - lino dancing
> her feet are moving
> it is a vigorous kind of dance step
> that flows up and down and across
> the lines that mark the squares
> that are the linoleum on the kitchen floor
>
> my grandparents house
> had a verandah and a view
> that looked down upon the city
> and over the twinkling lights
> that meant brisbane to me
> when I was small
>
> the verandah was enclosed in glass
> I used to glide away the hours
> with the elvis broom and my reflection
> each night I danced above the city
> I was happy
>
> she leans herself against me
> feet rapping a tattoo
> they move out as she slides down
> come back as she stands higher
> as a young girl she liked to dance
> above brisbane
>
> ~
>
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