Sorry it's taken me so long to get back into the swing of things. But thanx
for the comments about the poem.
Yeh, Gar, I noticed all the words ending in "ing" too! The poem ends with so
many of them. I'm not yet sure how to alter it (or leave it as it is). I
guess it's a poem that now needs to sleep and wake up when I've forgotten
how all the words follow each other - then I may be able to solve what
worries me a little too).
I hear what y say, too, about the denseness of the poem... but then the
irony between the title and the compactness of the poem is lost... The title
may not be the best, tho, anyway.
And, Frank, I sense Cruciform is a tad abstract for a poem that's trying to
be concrete. Good comment tho. And Perpetua, yeh, I think I was trying to
layer the poems with as many images as a Macdonald's special has fillings
(eurgh) and let the reader find one or more (so I'm glad you found one that
hit). And, others, thanx for the read!
Bob
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