Hi Grasshopper,
Even tho I like poems that have autonomous lines - I like this because it
hasn't. (Ah, readers are such fickle characters at times!). I find I'm
reading it and picking up semblences of the characters from the way phrases
are broken.
I'm a little puzzled, tho, that she goes "down" her path to the door. I sort
of (always) assume one goes up a path to a door... (Even if the path's going
down a slope? Well, yes!)
Bob
>From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: gateway
>Date: Tue, 20 Jul 2004 06:32:17 +0100
>
> gateway
>
>he hoped that she would ask him
>in but she stands behind the gate
>and chats softly, asks about
>the postman, was he late, has
>he called? she is going out
>again, will not return until
>the day after tomorrow, would
>he take in a package if it came?
>he stands beside the gate and
>nods, of course, anything, after all,
>that's what a neighbour's for,
>and she smiles, goes down her path
>past mounds of brightfaced violas,
>and shuts the slick red door
>behind her.
>
> grasshopper
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