Interesting comment, Arthur.
I scan this as mostly iambic, with acceptable variations; excepting L3, and
to a lesser extent L11 (which also has 9 syllables).
Much though I admire Heaney, I don't think you can hold him up as a paragon
when it comes to rhyming best practice.
Concerning arts/out, the problem for me is, pronounced in RP it's nowhere
near a rhyme; pronounced in Yorkshire it's almost a homophone, therefore
not good rhyme.
As a general rule, I think slant (half) rhymes work OK if you start a poem
on slants and progress to perfect rhyme; but less well the other way round.
Sorry, I'm sounding pedantic, so I'll stop.
Best regards,
David
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