Glad to be of help. I think "fine September day" is probably enough even.
bw
James
>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Pickled eggs
>Date: Thu, 3 Jan 2002 09:47:02 +0000
>
>on 3/1/02 9:24 am, James Bell at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > Hi Sally,
> >
> > Along with another commentator I think the first stanza is the poem.
>There
> > has been so much written on 9/11 that there is a tendency, certainly for
>me,
> > to instantly detect a cringe factor, or, wrong note as you put it.
>Stanza
> > one fine. Forget the rest. Hope this helps.
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
>Yep, thanks James, the first stanza was the poem and the second stanza was
>the cringe. Its wonderful how poetry always finds you out. I wanted to make
>it clear within the poem what I was taking about, & thats why I started on
>the second stanza. Now I've added a line near the bottom of the poem, which
>I think does the trick. Sally
> >
> >> From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
> >> Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >> To: [log in to unmask]
> >> Subject: New sub: Pickled eggs
> >> Date: Tue, 1 Jan 2002 20:13:44 +0000
> >>
> >> Pickled eggs
> >>
> >> It was my daughterıs birthday,
> >> and my weekday off.
> >> I made a jar of pickled eggs
> >> with piquant herbs and vinegar
> >> and in my wishful-housewife mood
> >> I set them in a screw-top jar
> >> then labelled them and put them in
> >> a cupboard where my dinner plates
> >> and other kitchen playthings are.
> >> I labelled them, although it was
> >> plain they were pickled eggs
> >> (so pretty in white vinegar
> >> traced with leaves of tarragon).
> >> I dated them in pen and ink.
> >> Then I went down to the post.
> >> The pile of newspapers had gone,
> >> not one was left. Strange faces on
> >> the villagers I noticed next.
> (It was a fine September day.)
> >> Then I found out what was wrong.
> >>
> >> ---------------------------------
> >>
> >> QUESTION; Does this poem stirke a wrong note, especially those
> >> in USA what do yu think? It is certainly my true response and I wasn't
>able
> >> to write it till I commented on Gary's end of year poem. I have now
> >> exorcised the pickled eggs but have I described that day in a way that
>is
> >> acceptable to others? Sally-ee
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
> >
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