Hello, Gary. A few thoughts about your sonnet below. I'm not sure about
the title: it seems awfully long. The first four lines are interesting and
informative but gets rather listy and, in the end, I'm not really sure what
you're trying to say but that's probably just me being thick, so don't worry
about it.
bw
christina
Christina, an old sonnet I've been trying to improve. A long way to go or
maybe I need to admit I am not a sonnetter.
Thanks.
Gary
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