Hi Ryfkah,
I think I, too, got confused with plum! I guess I thought of the fruit, and
(silly me) thought of squashed or smeared plums...
The rest of the poem works really well... but it's a bit of a shame that
"passion flower" is such an obvious name! (Some flowers have exotic/erotic
sounding names that don't give so much away)
Bob
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New: Passion and Other Flowers
>Date: Thu, 4 Jul 2002 14:52:47 EDT
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>Passion and Other Flowers
>
>Spread plum the Passion Flower
>postures by her bed in a shot glass
>Morning finds closed petals
>
>A decade ago the woman's
>husband left They made love
>then he was gone forever
>
>In the yard Passion Flowers bloom
>each petal caressed by the sun
>their violet vivid against concrete
>
>Her lover probes in whispers
>With kisses she unfolds
>Sundown eclipses lavender
>
>Another bud opens
>
>Ryfkah 7/4/02
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