David I addressed " Riven meat" in my re-write. Thanks for your reception. I
am considering the last two lines.
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From: "Brigid Anthony" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Sunday, January 13, 2002 8:03 PM
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Fine, fierce writing, Arthur.
For "riven meat" would you consider "riven flesh"? (I know, tones it down
a little.)
At the close, perhaps "Time swilled my wellingtons clean". (Even thrifty
Yorkshiremen can't make them last 50 years.)
And the bits bother me ("but still some parts remain"?).
Regards,
David
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