Bob, I like 2 best, the flowers lyrical, #3 next with wingbeats. #1 is
less successful, lacks the lyrics the others have and
By the Monument everyone,
as if they didn't, saw (trip on this line, as if they didn't. Something
like (without the ing), pretending otherwise or not to
the invisible man. Sprawled
Thanks.
Gary
June Thomas and new Gar trash at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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