Shalom James

In a message dated 6/26/02 1:00:42 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:

<< SITUATION REPORT

Nothing of importance has happened
since you boarded the train
early this morning

Apart from feeling a little tired
nobody has been cruel or unkind

some have put on good fronts
to disguise their lack of confidence
while others have thanked me for helping out

Some tea has been drank [drunk?]
and contents of the lunch box devoured

There are no strong memories
of yesterday's joys or disappointments -
no poetry written unless you count this [I would skip unless you count this]

The pigeons continue to scavange
down by the river where I sit to write
and the wind blows as it has done for days
though no rain for an hour or so

A cormorant stands on the opposite bank  [like the detail of a commorant
here; adds flavor]
wings stretched out to air and dry as they do
while the only intangible is my thoughts
and how they get round to missing you  [endearing]

not what has happened I know
yet continuo to this unmelodic music >> [continue?]  [I like this ending but
wonder if you really need this last stanza; could end with missing you]

kol tuv, Ryfkah