Hi Ryfkah,
This is great!
I get a feel of space and openness... one of those poems that's followed by
a long silence following the smile that it's the feathers that wing toward
infinity (as I find I'm making sense of it)...
The line: "A single beer bottle stays sentinel" seems to take so long to
read. Is the word "single" needed?
And I really love the way this is crafted:
>My child's fever breaks His appetite
>
>returns Sister bakes
>a cake Desert winds shout
The line breaks, the swtanza break, the sound of it, the way the white
spaces work, the pauses...
I know you don't work with long titles but I feel as if I want to call this
(something like): RYFKAH SITS (SOMEWHERE) AND DISCOVERS INFINITY
Bob
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New: Infinity
>Date: Mon, 24 Jun 2002 12:54:09 EDT
>
>Infinity
>
>as below so above
>
>The Yucca spill their milky blooms
>A single beer bottle stays sentinel
>on patio ledge Doves serenade
>Grandma waves her rattles
>dances her Kiowa healing
>My child's fever breaks His appetite
>
>returns Sister bakes
>a cake Desert winds shout
>Our ancestors celebrate
>We chant long
>ago words Spirits rise
>as feathers winging toward infinity
>
>as above so below
>
>Ryfkah 6/24/02
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