I know what you are getting at here gary and the effect you want but I can't
go much on the repetition in the first two stanzas. Others could be
different in this repect. I like the idea though I'd want to change the
vehicle.
bw
James
>From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Journey
>Date: Thu, 20 Jun 2002 16:12:04 -0700
>
>Journey
>
>no matter how fine the thread
>no matter how high the bridge
>or swift the rapids
>
>no matter how tattered the web
>no matter how slick the road
>or strong the wind
>
>you complete the journey
>to return home
>with fumbled key in broken lock
>
>June Thomas and new Gar trash at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
>
>*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
>
>Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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