Thanks Gary, you are very generous.Regards Arthur.
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From: "Gary B" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, June 20, 2002 3:38 PM
Subject: Re: New sub:Unfinished Mile:1944
> Arthur, I'm going to mark the parts that really got my attention:
>
> In borrowed pumps I toed the line, (great start
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> I was eleven. (near perfect placement for this short line which sets the
> scene so very well
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> The reek and sheen of their embrocation defeated me. (quick run to the
> dictionary, but gladly
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> belittled by their belling, comforted by nettles. (ouch, great image
>
> and the sweet mollification of yarrow (and icing on the cake
>
> A pleasure.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
>
> June Thomas and new Gar trash at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
>
> *New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at:
http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
>
> Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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