I just got back and the first poem is about going away. How about that? The
irregular line length is very deliberate as is the third person view point.
Tell me what you think o dear friends.
EXIT PURSUED BY A BEAR
He came across a bridge and wondered
if in crossing
it would be his exit
in much the same way
as Walt and Hart before him
over Brooklyn
for even here there was the crosswind
that levelled diversity
brought goosepimples
to the most fair complexion
and ratled the fabric of waterproofs
to the extent that they were exposed
above the thick stone parapets
The bear was still some way behind
and party to only a faint scent -
just the way he liked it -
though still could imagine
the bulk of bone and flesh and fur and how
it would lumber with true implacability
across the tundra of his bare urban landscape
to find him convinced
that even crossing water would not make a difference
He hesitated
like many before
and only saw the maw and the tooth and claw
in the nick of time
able to make his exit
though still pursued
over the bridge
into later scenes and acts
bw
James
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