Sally, what a great job on the rewrite. What a difference. Much better.
Sue http://members.aol.com/poetscalf
<< > Woodpecker (revised)
>
> muffled yaffle through the silence
> drumdrumdrumdrumdrum
>
> tall close trees mottled with lichen
> in the cleanest air,
> dry, cool evening, pale white sky
> quiet road with none
> but my companion and I
> passing by
>
> drumdrumdrumdrumdrum again
> - silence ever deeper -
>
> we look upward, crane our necks
> you are safely hidden
> Bewick said your young will run
> up and down trunks before they fly
> but no such sight for us
> not in front of us do you
>
> drumdrumdrumdrumdrumdrumdrum
> drumdrumdrumdrumdrum.
>
> Don't you ever bother singing?
> Need you, with the small wood ringing
> drumdrumdru
> Silence springs back into place
> like a branch you flew away from.
> In the gaps between your sound
> we hear profound seclusion
> in your haunt.
>
>
> Sally Evans >>
|