Yeh, Sally,
I like the way the rhymes (sky,I, by) sort of work to soften the sounds of
yourselves...
& then there's a repetition of the pattern (hidden, run, down) in the next
stanza (that isn't as visually obvious, like the woodpecker itself, I guess!
Subtle, Clever!)
And the Bewick quote gives just the slightest hint of other things!
Bob
>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: woodpecker
>Date: Sun, 9 Jun 2002 22:51:45 +0100
>
>Woodpecker
>
>drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum
>silence silence silence
>
>tall close trees mottled with lichen
>in the cleanest air,
>dry, cool evening, pale white sky
>quiet road with none but you and I
>passing by
>and
>drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum
>silence silence silence
>
>we look upward, crane our necks
>you are safely hidden
>Bewick said your young will run
>up and down trunks before they fly
>but no such sight for us
>not in front of
>us
>drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum
>silence silence silence
>
>drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum-drum
>silence silence silence
>
>Sally Evans
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