thanks - yes - 'day' needs to go
I'll think on it

as to the sentiments - there's enough irony in this to build a
battleship......

Terri )O(

-----Original Message-----
From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
Behalf Of Bob Cooper
Sent: 04 June 2002 17:07
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: New: The Party at the Palace


Again I've had to struggle with politics & principle's here! But I've
actually read it! I've read it!
A fine use of simple rhymes (and uncluttered rhythm) here Terri.
To my jaundiced point of view the poem 's far better than what it's
describing! The line:
"Hold to the day when faith smiled on our fun," is a line I could never
write... so I find it difficult to comment on. (But could it be "Hold to the
night when... etc?)
Bob


>From: alderoak <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New: The Party at the Palace
>Date: Tue, 4 Jun 2002 11:17:49 +0100
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>Imitation, Gary, is the sincerest form of flattery.
>My first rondeau - and I have to agree, these repetitive forms are
>tortuous!
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>for those who need facts in order to appreciate the fiction, some are
>appended
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>The Party at the Palace - Jubilee 2002
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>Remember this! The palace wreathed in fire.
>When all the world forgets the dark will come.
>Hold to the day when faith smiled on our fun,
>When 'All you need is love' could still inspire
>And multicoloured hands were linked as one.
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>Remember this! The palace wreathed in fire.
>When all the world forgets the dark will come.
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>Folds in a map, the dust of Old Empire
>Crackles into a fuse whose fireworks run
>Far and away the brightest, set to stun.
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>Remember this! The palace wreathed in fire.
>When all the world forgets the dark will come.
>Blinded we'll watch the sun blot out the sun.
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>Terri )O(
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>The British Queen had a mega-party in her back garden to celebrate her 50th
>year on the throne. There was a superb firework display, with golden fire
>pouring down the front of the palace.
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>The day before the party, a small fire in a flat in one wing of the palace
>caused some anxiety.
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>India and Pakistan are arranging a party in Kashmir. The fireworks are
>expected to be earth-shattering.
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>T )O(






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