The title makes one think about what will be the poem; this is good.
Your poem seems to have emotion missing. Though well-written, for me, it
reads too much like a newspaper article.
I do like another bare breasted beauty - nice alliterative sound and catches
the eye of the reader right away.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 5/25/02 11:30:51 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Thoughts welcome.
Lynn
A Model of Success
Another bare breasted beauty
bounces from the page
her career began at university
she was spotted on the campus
by a photographer called Chad
Chad is now her partner
he has a fifty percent claim
to her losses and gains
he orchestrates her affairs
and her exposure
She's a successful model >>
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