Lynn, apart from the fact that I like the tightness of this small poem
understanding what 'duotone' is would help towards a better appreciation.
<grin> regards Arthur.
----- Original Message -----
From: Ahren Warner
To: [log in to unmask]
Sent: Saturday, May 25, 2002 10:40 AM
Subject: Re: New Sub - Patterns
Hi Lynn.
I really liked this, I only wondered whether the word 'spontaneity' could be
changed, it seems to disturb the rhythym of the line when I read it, might
be wrong-what d'you think?
Cheers
Ahren.
>From: Lynn Owen
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New Sub - Patterns
>Date: Sat, 25 May 2002 09:35:55 +0100
>
> Thoughts welcome.
> Lynn
>
> Patterns
>
> Once again I bend at the corners to fit the grooves
>restraining every stretch of independent thought
>deflecting spontaniety in favour of order
>pursuing perfection with duotone
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