In a message dated 4/25/02 3:51:45 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< living colour comes only from naked skin
and the harlequin costumes of bathers
queuing on the platform >>
I like these lines, especially term harlequin costumes.
See if you can delete any adjectives or prepositional phrases and see what
happens. I like your verse here, but it seems a bit wordy.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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