Grassy and Frank made good points so I'm off to do some rewrite. A Malay
form, designed for Malay language so doing in English a bit of a stretch
(like other forms, such as Ghazal), which may be why the French reinvented
it as pantoum.
The link to all you want to know: http://home.talkcity.com/HobbyCt/latbid/
BTW, this is for a challenge called Four Poets Tortured and I, silly man,
picked the form.
Thanks for the read and suggestions.
Gary
Melody for April and Gar finds at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
The Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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