> Unloose the butterflies of terror!
> Let fly the birds of blood
> to fluster in our throats!
this is such a great reworking of the conventional
other thoughts in text
Terri )O(
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From: "arthur007" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, April 20, 2002 2:48 PM
Subject: New sub: Turbulence
> Turbulence
>
> South of Faro, homeward bound,
> the sky's titanic fists hammer our fragile wings.
> Ping! Fasten your seat belts! [this feels oddly different - will you
indicate this change of voice by font/italics on paper?]
>
> Unloose the butterflies of terror!
> Let fly the birds of blood
> to fluster in our throats!
>
> Down the aisle the ravaged child,
> slack-jawed, unfocussed eyes,
> head rolling like a sea-tossed skiff,
>
> supported by her father, [she] honks,
> flaps thin arms, flutters slender fingers,
> spools threads of space into vaporous skeins.
>
> They [who?] wait outside the toilet,
> legs twitch and we [same as 'They'?] politely tolerate
> the danse macabre of this broken marionette. [does this refer to the child
or the vessel?]
>
> Another thunderous blow reverberates,
> our startled eyes engage a grin [our? meaning you and the child or some
group and the child? or you and They?]
> she dredges from some pool of mockery deep within.
>
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