on 4/4/02 7:54 am, Arthur at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> This is a rewrite of "Rooks" with an additional strophe which gives it new
> focus. I think I realised what poem I was in fact writing after I had posted
> it before.
>
> Its fascinating and fun. Why Theo? and why the balanced stanza heap ( rooks'
nest?) which has lost itself in the reply. and I don't quite get the title.
Is it Van Gogh. It must be. Rackt is ok but I'm not sure about dinning - you
already have raucous in that stanza so the poem is noisy enough already.
Nice one though. Sally ee
>
> Redeemed by Irises.( for Vincent)
>
> south of the bone
> -white church in high elms
> they racket
> swirl around thorned
> nests knot-bunched
> in top branches
>
> they scavenge laced wheat,
> Theo! always
> snake-limbed cypresses
> tumultuous stars
> light-haloed lamps
> burn night's
>
> black they tumble-
> down in raucous mockery
> harsh against a sun
> -bleached sky
> beaked and fractious
> as dinning taunts of madness.
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