Dear Ryfkah,
I think there are few people who won't sympathise with this poem.
The only niggle for me was the word 'avoidance' which I found a bit unsubtle
for the rest of the piece. I would have preferred a more neutral word like
'distance'.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, April 02, 2002 9:01 PM
Subject: New: Us
> Us
>
> You spoke the words
> a time glass tilted to the side
> I wanted to be partners
> You wanted the wind next to your sails
> I wanted the picket fence
> vegetable garden and prayer
> You wanted the Taj Mahal
> curry and avoidance
>
> I became me
> You became you
> We are not us
> just the passing
> of once more than friends
> into strangers
> like faraway thunder
>
> Ryfkah 4/2/02
>
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