Hi Gary,
This is a lovely poem. Just a few quibs for possible polishes. I've done
them on the text. Do you need to ask questions in the poem?
bw
James
>From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Do You Remember the Big Snow of '02?
>Date: Fri, 22 Mar 2002 13:59:57 -0800
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>4tete#43 Do You Remember the Big Snow of '02?
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>Unlace your mukluks,
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>strip to one pair of soaks.
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>Remove your parka, shawl and gloves
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>store your sweaters in space bags.
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>There will be no more snowball fights,
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>angels,
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>icicle swords,
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>carrot noses and button eyes.
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>Winter has gone (his merry way) leave out
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>to leave us with galoshes,
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>umbrellas,
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>waterproofed rain coats,
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>puddles,
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>gutters plugged with new leaves.
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>But wait!
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>Clear the sleep from your eyes.
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>Look out the window.
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>Lawn, shrubs, fence are white,
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>powder piles high
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>as flakes descend
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>like dandelion seeds in June.
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>Pink, yellow, blush
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>hidden beneath a pale coat
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>sprayed like errant paint
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>straying from polar climes.
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>Do willows weep
>and cedars hang their head?
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>We'll rummage through closets,
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>open bags and boxes.
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>We'll have a last snowball fight,
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>sneak up to put ice down your neck.
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>We'll search the icebox for a carrot nose
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>though a cucumber may have to do.
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>And the angels will fly through drifts
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>like daredevils through pink clouds.
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>But wait!
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>Pull your head out of your computer
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>Take a (gander) outside. too colloquial for the poem, "look"?
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>Sunshine bounces off of grass and weed,
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>green reflected against blue sky.
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>Quince, cherry, plum and chain tree
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>are decorated as if for a parade.
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>Stick and twig snap,
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>another nest constructed.
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>Although barely buds,
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>the smell of berries
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>attacks my senses.
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>Do peonies nodsleepingly love this line
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>and roses bloom blue?
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>Scrounge through drawers for shades and shorts,
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>dust off the lawn furniture and clean the grill.
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>Carve cuke and carrot into a salad
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>made of fresh picked greens.
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>Sun screen to block the rays
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>and poetry to wile away the day.
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>But wait.
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>Tina March guest and Gar tells tales at:
>http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
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>Poets for Peace. ¡Poemas sí, balas no!
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bw
James
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