Ryfkah,
As I think I have mentioned before I feel that I do
not have the requisite back-ground or involvement to
enter fully into the experience of this poem.
However, I love the lines which speak of the
commitment to loving another which is part of the
arranged marriage: ('like sea sand ...already'). Do
you really need the brackets?
The last three lines are beautiful with their simple
words, rich vowel sounds and lovely cadence.
cheers, cara
--- Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Gan Eden
#22/Before the Sacrifice
>
> Below tinker-bell galaxy
> I gaze at the grassy mound
> sense primordial history's lament
> As son of Sarah the priestess
> prepares my manhood passage
>
> The time of becoming is here
> The Tigris and Euphrates beg
> awareness for me
> Earth's song malingers
> Our Source beckons
>
> Laughter tinkles in night
> Mother readies her herbs
> I crave this next step
> Circumcism at eight days long ago
> I am now to be one with
>
> the One Smoke prances
> in pitch shadow
> I breathe its mysteries richly
> envision a dove
> wonder where is the rainbow
>
> At thirteen I am a man
> Tomorrow our servant leaves
> to find my wife
> (like sea sand or starry dark
> I love her already)
>
>
> and my father Abraham
> will climb the Mount with me
> to make a sacrifice
>
> Ryfkah 3/16/02R
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