Welcome back, Sally. Missed you. Good poem that
spreads out in the mind after reading. I think
perhaps the wording of the second line could read more
smoothly or evocatively. 'as no one else could' is
the only variant I can think of just now but I think
it allows that spreading of the meaning a little more
than as is. cheers, cara
--- Sally James <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Mummy's
boy
>
> I saw him wince
> no one else did
> He never struck out
> had a rage, or tantrum
> yet I saw his tremor.
> Too big for me to protect now
> a life of his own
> Yet I felt his pain
> I always will
> He needs my shawl
> his comfort blanket
> Little boy lost
> in a big man's shoes.
>
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