Dear Arthur,
This is a very good descriptive piece, but I think 'gale-gallant' hits a
wrong note. It would be fine in an exultant poem like the Windhover, say,
but for me, it is far too heroic for the noisy, slightly maniacal image of
the birds that I get from the rest of the poem.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Arthur" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, March 09, 2002 7:48 PM
Subject: new sub: Rooks
> Rooks
>
> East of the bone
> -white church in high elms,
> a racket of rooks
> swirls around thorny nests
> bunched like knots
> in top branches.
> Black as funereal crepe,
> they rise, gale-gallant,
> vault and tumble
> down streets of air,
> harsh against a rain
> -bleached light;
> beaked and fractious
> as the taunts of madness.
>
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