Hi cara,
I've been carrying the poem's narrative around with me for a while
(intrigued with it - because of something I'm working on too!).
I too have wondered about the loose last line... I tend to think it feels
lost on its own (and may be gathering more impact than it deserves -- or, at
least, detracts from all else that the poem's saying).
I'm more intrigued, tho, by the point of view adopted by the poet. In the
1st stanza the poet could be a neighbour... But the 2nd stanza makes the
poet more like someone with a cam-corder until we're allowed into a
neighbour's head and we know what she's thinking... Then the 3rd stanza gets
into other neighbours heads as well...
I'm wondering if the poet BECAME a particular person who's seeing all this
(and knows things about what's going on as well - but, perhaps not
everything - then lots of things (like the poem's shape, as well as what
information we're given) may get sorted. Different narrators would see
different things, know different things. (Who the person is - who's become
the narrator - needn't be discolosed tho! But their identity could be...
That's another choice!)
Bob
>From: cara may <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New Sub: The Three Sisters
>Date: Fri, 15 Mar 2002 15:47:27 +0000
>
> The Three Sisters
>
>
>
> They come on Sundays now,
> touch their long dark hair into place
> as they slide out of the emerald Clio,
> wave, blow kisses, to their mother,
> dance down the steps into the hill-side house
> where once they played, and wept, and grew.
>
> Today the old car bucks and whirrs
> at the intricacies of turning-spaces
> as its driver mimes a greeting
> to a social-worker, neighbour,
> who stays a moment on her doorstep,
> thinks 'Perhaps a conversation...'
>
>
> Others notice through their windows,
> remember how they miss the siblings,
> wonder what the mother does
> while the daughters are indulged and feted
> by their father and the dark-haired girl-friend
> who joined him from the on-line chat-room
>
> after his family had moved out.
>
>
>cara march 2002
>
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