Yeh Christina,
I wish we didn't have to write poems like this. But I'm glad you have.
I don't know if line 4 needs commas... (I don't know).
I know I don't want to say anything else about it, but thanks for the
writing,
Bob
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: First draft: 10 March, 2002
>Date: Wed, 13 Mar 2002 19:55:41 EST
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> 10 March, 2002
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> Another boy has blown himself to bits.
> His blood and brains are swabbed and wiped away
> with other mothers' sons
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> and who was what or why swills into soil,
> is edited and sanitised,
> turned on, switched off again.
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> christina fletcher
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