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From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Monday, March 11, 2002 10:21 PM
Subject: Re: new sub: Climbing on a bad day
> on 11/3/02 8:41 am, Arthur at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
>
> Interesting, Arthur. been there!
>
> Am I wrong or is swuthering Lancs while Cwm is Welsh? I don't think you
can
> mix dialects/regional words like that very successfully. But that's a
minor
> point.
>
> I like come, cwm, calm, loom, and perhaps you could have pulled in a few
> more of the rhyme words into this group - conquest, cheeks, seem a bit
alien
> to the poem and relief and mist are a bit obvious. Nit-picking only.
> Sally E
>
> > Climbing on a Bad Day.
> >
> > We turn from the cairn to face the flurries
> > of a sleet-thick, bladed rain as it sheets
> > down whetted wind. It buffets and bullies,
> > rattles my hood and bites my chin and cheeks.
> > Now only the wolfish weather and we
> > dare the slopes and ragged steeps of the cwm
> > where we stumble and find, under the lee,
> > out of the wind-song, behind a rock, calm.
> >
> > Now the swuthering mutes, a blessed relief,
> > my breath helmets my head with plumes of mist
> > as I blow my fingers to ringing life.
> > Hill of winds, cold, fatigue, selves, all overcome,
> > we grin, no words, jubilant in conquest.
> > Tomorrow's horizons already loom.
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