Excellent Grassy. Please have a look at the slightly direct run on from
stanza two to three. It might be worth considering reordering the beginning
of three:
At the supermarket on the way home he added a bunch of flowers to the
trolley
Maybe. bw, John
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From: "grasshopper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: 10 March 2002 00:28
Subject: New Sub: After
After
He thought about it for years
but there was always
some reason for delay:
after Christmas, after his birthday,
after he'd dumped his current.
Then it was after the wedding,
after the christening,
after nursery school,
always after.
After the doctor
had given him the news,
he thought of things
growing over years.
After he'd made the connection,
he picked up the phone
but then it was too late.
He added a bunch of flowers
to the supermarket trolley
and on the way home,
he parked by the cemetery
and left the chrysanthemums,
ferns and gypsophila
on a stranger's grave.
grasshopper
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