excellent first line, Arthur, hooks me right in. Bit bleak for my tastes,
but I love 'gale-gallent'.
Not sure about the 'Black as funereal crepe'
Do you mean funereal or funeral?
why not just 'funeral black'?
P-P
>From: Arthur <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: new sub: Rooks
>Date: Sat, 9 Mar 2002 19:48:13 -0000
>
>Rooks
>
>East of the bone
>-white church in high elms,
>a racket of rooks
>swirls around thorny nests
>bunched like knots
>in top branches.
>Black as funereal crepe,
>they rise, gale-gallant,
>vault and tumble
>down streets of air,
>harsh against a rain
>-bleached light;
>beaked and fractious
>as the taunts of madness.
Perpetua Pullman
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