and we hear it rip under the scrape of our mud on its photograph -
tearing through a peacekeeper's troop carrier, a pick-up truck, refugees.
Bob, good words. I might like it stretched out a bit with shorter lines, a
breath length if you will. Poetic but seems prosey at the length.
Gar wants to compalin about the ings, but I tell him you know his obsession.
Thanks.
Gary
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