I like the form of this poem, Christina, and the
language seems deft.
I am reading it as though the pronouns are third
person from line six but altered into first for
effect.I may have it all wrong.
I remember with my first poem for The-Works the
consensus seemed to be 'no notes'. Hope there's
something at least relevant in what I've written.
cheers, cara
--- Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> This is very much a first draft. I'm not sure
> whether this needs notes -
> probably does but Google has information if anyone
> is interested. I'm very
> nervous about this poem. Please tell me if it's
> awful or just a non-event.
> bw
> christina
>
>
>
> Septembers
>
>
> I think of Lutfi - his dictionary,
> his index finger missing.
>
> Here are his three wise monkeys - I keep them
> to remind me of what he said
>
> about Deir Yassin - how my memory
> drowned in oil. How I swallowed
>
> and forgot Qibya, gulped
> and the gulf deepened, widened
>
> until I saw a tidy evil,
> plugged ears and closed mouths,
>
> failed to mark the years
> between Septembers.
>
>
>
>
>
>
> christina fletcher
>
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