In a message dated 03/03/2002 1:15:41 PM Central Standard Time,
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<< Do you think it would word "better"
rearranged, and if so, in what order? Well, it is often beneficial to play
around with arrangement, making sure the strongest images come at the end so
they can linger in the reader's mind. But it has to be coherent too.
"Marooned on a planet far from home "might be a more interesting beginning
stanza.
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