on 7/1/02 6:12 am, Arthur at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> This is exceedingly good Ryfkah and a genuine and welcome addition to that
> sequence you seem to be continually extending.
> IMO "molecule" appears incongruous to the theme and language of the poem.
> "grain" or " mote" would serve I think. I follow the development of this
> sequence with eager anticipation. Good read thanks.
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Ryfkah *" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Monday, January 07, 2002 1:40 AM
> Subject: New Sub.: Wicket #20/Searching for Cain
>
>
I like these two new ones Ryfkah, this one the better I think, because
there is a clear storyline/argument holding the descriptions together. The
Sixpense one has bright images of tangerines (means middle east) and war,
and a sense of drifting, which is no doubt intended. Interest grabbing.
Sally-ee
> Wicket #20/Searching for Cain
>
> Marked by divorce
> a Scarlet D
> he yearns only to be loved
> authentically esteemed
>
> He drifts into exile
> a molecule of sand
> shifting in a great wasteland
> roamsroves some more
>
> We hail him Wandering Jew
> Great Spirit Father
> Enoch the Angel
> Master of Faut Pas
>
> He forfeits sisters brothers
> searches for family long left behind
> embraces the homeless
> the war-stricken the lost
>
> He is friend to many
> Many befriend him
> a poet who spews as rich sea foam
> in the wilderness
>
> Called home
> he is embraced
> a warrior of life's happening
> beyond lesser gods a survivor
>
> Ryfkah 1/6/02
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