This has possibilities Gary. How about doing the same lines in a different
sequence in each stanza.It could turn out very effective here. I thought
this was something of what you set out to do then changed.
bw
james
>From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New: Tanka, variation on a theme
>Date: Wed, 27 Feb 2002 08:01:05 -0800
>
>Re: Tanka
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> Variations on a theme:
>
>Blue lined paper drifts,
>wind blown against white fences.
>Rain soaked, green ink runs.
>Your words slide down the pages
>until they melt together.
>
>Blue notes drift
>against white fences.
>Green ink runs.
>Your words slip away
>to melt together.
>
>Rose blossoms
>float along the stream,
>forgotten.
>I shred your letters,
>dizzy from their scent.
>Feb guest is TE Ballard and Gar does garbage at:
>http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html,
>
>Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
bw
James
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