Well quite clearly she's in love with words! It would be churlish to take a
12 year olds piece to task but she does need to know about avoiding 'poetic'
words (e.g. 'shards' Yeek!) but I liked the delicacy of the rhyming and the
last line in particular, an 'ocean hanging off' the 'cheek'.
Nice one Zoe!
Best
Dave
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Leicester, England
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