dave wrote:
> Perhaps the first line of the final stanza needs to start with an
unstressed
> syllable, I find hitting the brakes on 'Then' at the start of a stanza a
> little forced, as further lines begin with a 'hit', maybe something like
> 'And then' twould be easier to hit the second word. This would have the
> benefit of pushing a stronger emphasis onto 'Death' at the inception of
the
> following line. Then!!!
Sorry to come into this so late, and uninformedly.
Don't think the question is the line beginning with a stressed syllable --
the remaining three lines all do.
How about dropping the second word, Candice, and having:
"Then finish of the higher wood".
or
"Finish of the higher wood"
... which solves the rhythmic problem (but may lose the sense you want).
"... the Higher wood". Higher Criticism, high culture?
Robin
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