Hi Frank, attractive idea - slightly inbetween at the moment maybe. I'd
tend to go more for the impressionistic and allow the narrative 'sense' to
be (progressively?) subverted. Just as a forinstance I find the repetition
of 'up and down' (lines 16 & 19) is undecided as to whether it is an
oversight or pressages a deliberate cyclicing of images.

best wishes, John



----- Original Message -----
From: "Frank Faust" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: 21 October 2001 03:52
Subject: sub - tango


I can't dance the tango I am
strictly a watching man
I can't dance the tango but I saw
him wriggle his behind
in a fancy little shuffle while
that girl nearly popped out... why
is she hanging upside down she
really almost... did you see the way
her leg flicked right up among his articles
I didn't know to tango
was to risk your jewels she's
wrapped herself around him
how can a woman so many times
she looks as though she'll break for sure and
what about those other two they're
mincing up and down and eye to eye
this isn't like a tango this is more
like watching as a flame licks
up and down with restless hands they're dressed
in black and burning red and can you
see she's climbing him from the ground until
he's holding her right before his face if I'm
ever going to tango I think I better make
a booking for a lesson

~

Frank

The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm

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