Congratulations, John. Were you wearing something special when awarded this
bursary? hehe
I like this version the best, too, although I keep wanting to reverse the
phrases in the second line.
T
> Thanks all for the feedback on this. It's proving to be a little bugger.
It
> may well be that my original 'sketch' was the best solution - it's the
> simplest (I hear you Frank!):
>
> crunching up and down
> the October wind louder than my feet
>
>
> Oh, and speaking of being a Smartyboots - I've just won an Arts Board
> bursary to write a treastise on the prosody of these little poems. I mean,
> nothing personal Helen, but some people write a poem every now and then,
> and others invent entire genres (Eee, and to thing we used to share the
> same words!).
>
> Well done H. What's the poem? John
>
>
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Marilyn Injeyan" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: 18 October 2001 22:09
> Subject: Re: crunching
>
>
> In a message dated 10/18/01 11:27:26 AM Pacific Daylight Time,
> [log in to unmask] writes:
>
>
> >
> > crunching up and down
> > the autumn leaves fall louder than my feet
> >
>
> This is nice but I like the other version better.
>
> Marilyn
|