I like this one...Some thing to think about, though, might we recasting
sentences to extract those "we's". I particularly like the contrasts here.
I think I "get" the meaning of the ending, but feel that you could restate
it in another way,keeping the key words and sentiments.
Terrie
> Sunday Sofa
>
> Sunday evening
> war breaks out
> retaliation
> fight back
> Nation glued to TV
> our sofa is warm
> cuddled together
> forever
> "stairway to heaven"
> echoes behind our warm sofa
> we can't change the world
> arm in arm we are special
> (despite the chaos around us)
> a molecule of this universe
> we maybe
> but a special one
> we'll be
> for all eternity
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